close reading bingo

Weaknesses:
number 6 - verb "use"
The diction within this passage uses a precise, with intermediate writing literal and direct.
http://alix2278.blogspot.com/2011/10/practice-diction-analysis.html

number 8 - punctuation goes inside quotation marks
Salinger first describes the parents as “touchy as hell”.
http://letsgetawesome5.blogspot.com/2011/10/practice-diction-analysis.html

number 1 - "he says" quote
Even when speaking of his brother, Holden says where D.B. lives “isn’t too far from this crumby place.”
http://freefifteen.blogspot.com/2011/10/practice-diction-analysis.html

number 2 - long quote
Then the teen bounces around topics from an autobiographical style to the purpose of his writing to randomness about his brother, “D.B” who’s “in Hollywood without describing them very well. That isn’t too far from [the narrator’s] crumby place.”
http://ariadna-permelia.blogspot.com/2011/10/confused-practice-diction-analysis.html


Best responses:
http://mbutchko.blogspot.com/2011/10/practice-diction-analysis.html
http://charliebucket15.blogspot.com/2011/10/practice-diction-analysis.html


Both responses sound educated and do not have weaknesses.

observation: diction

In the excerpt from Cruddy by Lynda Barry, the author’s blunt elevation and dull, yet figurative language emphasizes the bitter childishness and the jaded hate the author wishes the character to portray. The character’s attitude toward her life is constantly repeated as “cruddy” throughout the excerpt. Lynda Barry’s character demonstrates a disturbed, angry girl by describing her yelling at her sister from across the room. The girl screams to her sister “I will kill if you touch this, Julie, and if you do I swear to go I will kill you, no mercy, no take-backs private property, this means you, Julie, you” which explains how the infuriated girl feels toward her sister. The character’s vicious, scornful view on the world and hate toward everything depicts her ungrateful, pessimistic attitude toward life.

style mapping

The elevation of Cruddy by Lynda Barry is informal, because the diction is blunt and familiar. The sound of the words convey a harsh sound, through the dull words used. The language used suggest a connotation in the writing. The constant use of the word "cruddy" emphasizes the low diction. The sound also illustrate a noisy and dull environment, as apposed to a musical sound. The elevation of Girls in the Pants the Third Summer of the Sisterhood by Ann Brashares is a mix between formal and informal. At times the author uses elegant words, and other times the author uses familiar words to convey the meaning. The sound of the words emphasize a harsh and musical sound. The letters the girls write back and forth to each other are lyrical, and the rest of the story has a dull sound. The language used suggest a medium between connotation and denotation, because it is straightforward and suggestive in different parts of the story. The author uses words like "peculiar" and "significant" to convey fancy, scholarly diction.

week 9

Books: "Girls in Pants the Third Summer of the Sisterhood" by Ann Brashares
Pages this week: 153
Pages this semester:  1380

I was not here Wednesday, so I will write about it on different post.

third sisterhood of the traveling pants part5

Lena has had a very boring summer to me, but I guess to her it would be exciting. She has signed up for this art class, where she paints and draws nude models. Her model, Andrew, made her nervous at first. But, after a few minutes drawing him became natural. She loved the class, and of course her Father found out. Which he came and took her home. Lena is not the type to just rebel against her Father, but she was very upset. She loved the art she was doing, so she went back just to see everything. She liked the environment. The instructor, Annika was there, and wanted to talk to her. They talked about art and the whole situation. Annika wanted Lena to come back so bad that she gave her a job to clean up the studio after class for free tuition. Lena agreed, and when she would go to class, she would just tell her parents she picked up another shift at the restaurant. I think it was wrong for her Father to just pull her out, especially since Lena is an artist.

third sisterhood of the traveling pants part4

Lena and Carmen are kind of together, because Carmen is taking care of Valia, Lena’s Grandmother. Bapi, her husband and Lena’s Grandfather, died which meant Valia had to live with Lena back in American. Since then Valia has been very stubborn, because she misses her home in Greece and of course her husband. Valia living there has made it stressful for everyone. Lena and Effie purposlly got jobs so then they would not have to take care of Valia. Lena got a new job, at a restaurant, her father is very proud because he set it up. Lena’s mother asked Caremen, because she did not have to babysit the kids she had to last year. So Carmen agreed because she needed the money, plus she needed the money. Carmen has been taking care of Valia, which did not start off on the right foot. Valia is stubborn and so is Carmen, making the two buttheads. But, of course Valia wins because Carmen is in a way working for her. They had to go get an x-ray for Valia’s kidneys, because they were not working properly. Along the way her leg hurt, and so a boy help Carmen care her to the emergency room. The boy was so sweet to them, and he was kind of flirting with Carmen. Even though Valia was hurt, it brought her and Carmen closer. Plus, Carmen met a boy. I hope she and the boy start hanging out, because her summer needs some fun. I would go crazy if all I did during the summer was watch my best friends angry, stubborn Grandmother who does not speak English well.

third sisterhood of the traveling pants part3

Carmen, Tibby, and Lena stayed home, but at least they had each other. There was this graduation party that they were all going to, and Brian asked Tibby to be his date. It was kind of weird because they have been friends for so long. Brian and Tibby left the party early and went to hang out by themselves, they both were not the party type. They had that first kiss that night, it was so sweet. I can definetly tell that Brian loves Tibby, he even said it to her. I know Tibby would usually find it not true and gross, but with Brian she was happy about it. Tibby has grown up since the first book.